Tuesday, April 04, 2006

Changing equations

I was all of a foot and half or two
It was my very first time by the sea
I squealed, a little in fear, a little in delight
as the foamy edges reached for my feet

I held my father's hand a little tighter.
the waves were teasing,
But I stood still
little aware that thrill also meant beware

And then there was the time when a huge wave
nearly swept me away,
Comfort levels grew
but fear remained

There was then the phase
When going to sea meant
sandy beaches and castles of sand
watched on from a distance

I grew taller,perhaps wiser too
Each day as i walked by the sea
No one to watch on me this time
In solitude, the waves saw me through

But each time I tried holding back sand
It would slip through my fingers
Leaving only a few crystals
stuck to the dampness of my palm

So this time when I sat by the sea
Gave up trying to hold on to sand
Held the crystals that stayed back
Up against the sun instead

23 Comments:

At 6:02 AM, Blogger Vibha said...

first attempt...
dared to..
Finally.
honest opinions however rude...
are always welcome.

 
At 6:55 AM, Blogger Mirchii said...

Hello, my lovely - sorry, but I have stopped expressing anything for poetry that touches me deep, and remains inside long after the verses have been read over and over again. I just never seem to have enough words.

There is a tale of the sea that I badly wish to share with you. But I'm afraid that my story may rob me of the feeling your poem has offered. And I don't want that to escape.

 
At 9:58 AM, Blogger shreya said...

:)

 
At 11:54 AM, Blogger Gaurav said...

Nice work.
Keep it up.

 
At 8:43 PM, Blogger Vibha said...

mirchii and shreya...
first of all huge huge hug!!
you guys are too kind...really.

mirchii...maybe you could mail me your poem...i would love to read it.honest!

shreya...nothing compared to the wordplay and imagery that you use...but let's say i felt a little encouraged by reading your poems. thanks!

 
At 8:44 PM, Blogger Vibha said...

gaurav!!
thanks dude!! hoping to see you soon!!

 
At 9:08 PM, Blogger Suhas said...

:)...
Gr8 work smally!!!
What was holding you back ... Good now that you have made a start.. I am looking forward for the next one

 
At 11:36 PM, Blogger Saumya said...

Hey, very nice!!!really loved the way it ended!

 
At 3:48 AM, Blogger Vibha said...

thanks suhas!!
nothing compared to Icarius!!
;)

saumya...
even i liked the way it ended...though i hate giving up..i guess sometimes you don't have a choice..even if it doesen't really make you happy.

 
At 6:22 AM, Blogger schazeb kohari said...

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At 7:16 AM, Blogger shreya said...

my favourite three words: "am loving poetry"!!

can i say poetry is my favourite (and only real) cause?

take care babe!

 
At 12:00 PM, Blogger imran ahmad said...

amazing!!!!!!!!!!

 
At 8:47 PM, Blogger Vibha said...

to borrow mirchii's words...
chummies to all of you!!
:)
shreya, schazeb and imran.

 
At 5:27 AM, Blogger sowmya said...

adorable. and makes perfect sense. u just raised ur own bar, vibhu!! cant pretend to be poetry-ignorant anymore!! :-) hugs

 
At 8:39 AM, Anonymous Sanyam said...

Touching....

 
At 2:20 PM, Blogger Gaurav said...

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At 2:21 PM, Blogger Gaurav said...

Sanyam,
I hope you are not writing that short in exams, your profs will struggle to understand.
Love your writing skills in Macro.
BEST OF LUCK.

 
At 8:46 PM, Blogger Vibha said...

sowmya and sanyam...
thanks guys...
sanyam..all the best for your exams.
and really..am quite overwhelmed by the flood of compliments..

 
At 10:01 PM, Blogger Mirchii said...

k vibzilla! yeh dil maaaangay mooooreee... aahaa! (*does kachra aishwarya pose*)

chummies!

 
At 11:25 PM, Blogger Saumya said...

hey vibha..about giving up..sometimes giving up on things inspite wanting them badly is the best thing to happen... cos the things you have given up on would anyways would have never made you happy..

 
At 1:49 AM, Blogger Mirchii said...

I feel sucky...
...and lost.

:(

 
At 4:05 AM, Blogger Vibha said...

sammy! (coz i just happen to know too many people with the name sowmya)
i am yet to figure that out...the giving up being good for and you all that crap!! :)
am taking saumerset maugham's advice and creating a refuge for myself from all miseries by reading...

mirchii!
what happened sweets? sab theek hai na? ab meri poetry itni bhi udaas nahin thi yaar...
am still waiting for your tale by the sea.
cheer up girl!!
philhaal..agar mein is comp lab mein ek aur minute baithi rahi tho i might just end up getting baked..
too many power cuts here..

 
At 3:13 AM, Blogger Rajesh said...

Nice try...i like people writing poetry...i like to my self .. only wrote one and a half...

but the reality...
why did you write it in the first place at all... couldnt get what you wanted to convey...and the ending betrayed my last hope in the poem.

 

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